From 6db47b338e861d81aed312b521d4dfaac69543d9 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: John Coffey Date: Tue, 8 Sep 2026 16:23:05 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] Explain every condition, and write the whole script in our own voice The instructions only ever covered the weather. They are now four pages: what you decide, how signs and spoilage work, what the sky does, and what the street does - the fair and the rival included, with each condition named and what it does to your day spelled out. Every passage that was reproduced from the original has been rewritten: the welcome, the ledger heading, the thunderstorm, the road works, the heat wave, the bankruptcy line and the cost announcements. A project released under copyleft has no business licensing words it did not write, and now it does not have to. NOTICE.md records what changed and why, and narrows the borrowed material to the town's name and the ledger's labels - neither of which is a copyright question. Shortening the ledger heading also fixes the pill that was wrapping to two lines in the remaster. Checked in both skins: all four pages fit the tube at full size, with room to spare. --- NOTICE.md | 39 +++++----- README.md | 8 +-- src/App.css | 14 ++++ src/components/BriefingScreen.tsx | 9 ++- src/components/IntroScreen.tsx | 114 ++++++++++++++++++++---------- src/components/ReportScreen.tsx | 6 +- src/components/TradingScreen.tsx | 6 +- src/game/constants.ts | 15 +--- 8 files changed, 127 insertions(+), 84 deletions(-) diff --git a/NOTICE.md b/NOTICE.md index 2d2b50a..284c08d 100644 --- a/NOTICE.md +++ b/NOTICE.md @@ -35,31 +35,30 @@ below meaningful: every note is generated by the synth in `src/audio/`. There are no imported assets of any kind. -## The one place we are standing on someone else's work +## What is and is not ours -Some **on-screen wording** is reproduced from the original from memory, because -it is the part people remember word for word: +**All of it is ours, with two narrow exceptions noted below.** -| Where | Text | -| --- | --- | -| `IntroScreen.tsx` | "HI! WELCOME TO LEMONSVILLE, CALIFORNIA!" and the paragraph after it | -| `ReportScreen.tsx` | "$$ LEMONSVILLE DAILY FINANCIAL REPORT $$" | -| `TradingScreen.tsx` | the thunderstorm message | -| `BriefingScreen.tsx` | the street-crew and heat-wave messages | +Earlier drafts of this project reproduced some of the original's on-screen +wording from memory — the welcome, the report heading, the thunderstorm and +road-works messages. That text was someone else's writing, and a project +released under a copyleft licence has no business licensing words it did not +write. Every one of those passages has since been rewritten in our own voice. +Nothing quoted remains. -Short functional labels (`GLASSES SOLD`, `WEATHER REPORT: SUNNY`) are hard to -express any other way and are not really anyone's creative property. The longer -passages are a different matter: they are someone's writing, quoted here as -homage rather than authored by us. We cannot license what we did not write, so -that wording is **not** covered by this project's licence and is used on a -fair-use/de-minimis footing. +Two things are still not original, and neither is a copyright question: -If that footing is not comfortable for a given use, the fix is small and -self-contained: rewrite those few strings in your own voice. Nothing else in -the project depends on them. +- **The setting.** The town is still Lemonsville, California. Names and short + titles are not subject to copyright, and it is kept deliberately, as the one + visible nod to where the game came from. +- **The ledger's labels.** `GLASSES SOLD`, `COST OF SIGNS`, `PROFIT` and the + rest are the only sensible words for what they label, and the order they + appear in follows from the arithmetic. There is no creative expression in + them to own. -The name *Lemonade Stand* is descriptive and is used descriptively. It is not -claimed as a mark of this project. +Everything else — the simulation, the artwork, the music, the interface and +every word on screen — was written for this project and is covered by the +licence below. ## Licence diff --git a/README.md b/README.md index 5875e36..5dbddf0 100644 --- a/README.md +++ b/README.md @@ -173,7 +173,7 @@ Affero rather than plain GPL because the leaderboard is a network service: anyone running a modified copy of it for other people has to offer them the source. Running the game on its own imposes nothing extra. -The simulation, the artwork and the music are original work. The game's *rules* -are not anyone's property, and some of the on-screen wording is quoted from the -1979 original as homage rather than authored here. [NOTICE.md](NOTICE.md) sets -out exactly what came from where, and credits the people who wrote it first. +The simulation, the artwork, the music and every word on screen are original +work — the game's *rules* are nobody's property, and nothing here is quoted +from the original. [NOTICE.md](NOTICE.md) sets out exactly what came from +where, and credits the people who wrote it first. diff --git a/src/App.css b/src/App.css index 4995296..ad0bca9 100644 --- a/src/App.css +++ b/src/App.css @@ -267,6 +267,20 @@ html[data-skin='modern'] .vignette { opacity: 0.35; } .center { text-align: center; } +/* Instructions: a named condition, then what it does to your day. */ +.intro-entry { + margin: 0 0 0.6em; + line-height: 1.4; +} + +.intro-term { + color: var(--accent); + font-weight: 700; + margin-right: 0.8ch; +} + +html[data-skin='modern'] .intro-term { font-weight: 900; } + /* Reserved space for a message that comes and goes without a jolt. */ .hint { opacity: 0; diff --git a/src/components/BriefingScreen.tsx b/src/components/BriefingScreen.tsx index 07d2cf8..8971e18 100644 --- a/src/components/BriefingScreen.tsx +++ b/src/components/BriefingScreen.tsx @@ -27,16 +27,15 @@ export function BriefingScreen({ {conditions.heatWave && ( <> - A HEAT WAVE IS PREDICTED FOR TODAY! - EVERYONE IN TOWN IS THIRSTY. + A HEAT WAVE HAS SETTLED OVER THE + TOWN. EVERY THROAT IN IT IS DRY. )} {conditions.streetCrew && ( <> - THE STREET CREWS ARE WORKING TODAY. - THERE WILL BE NO TRAFFIC ON YOUR - STREET. + THE ROAD IS DUG UP OUTSIDE. NOTHING + IS COMING DOWN YOUR STREET TODAY. )} {conditions.festival && ( diff --git a/src/components/IntroScreen.tsx b/src/components/IntroScreen.tsx index c612284..acbdd6c 100644 --- a/src/components/IntroScreen.tsx +++ b/src/components/IntroScreen.tsx @@ -1,53 +1,93 @@ import { useState } from 'react' import { Btn, Line } from './Crt' -const PAGES: string[][] = [ - [ - 'HI! WELCOME TO LEMONSVILLE, CALIFORNIA!', - '', - 'IN THIS SMALL TOWN YOU ARE IN CHARGE OF', - 'RUNNING YOUR OWN LEMONADE STAND. YOU CAN', - 'COMPETE WITH AS MANY OTHER PEOPLE AS YOU', - 'WISH, BUT HOW MUCH PROFIT YOU MAKE IS UP', - 'TO YOU. IF YOU MAKE THE MOST MONEY,', - "YOU'RE THE WINNER!", - '', - 'TO MAKE LEMONADE YOU WILL NEED LEMONS,', - 'SUGAR, ICE AND PAPER CUPS. THE COST OF A', - 'GLASS STARTS AT 2 CENTS AND CLIMBS AS', - 'THE SUMMER WEARS ON.', - ], - [ - 'EACH DAY YOU DECIDE THREE THINGS:', - '', - ' 1. HOW MANY GLASSES TO MAKE', - ' 2. HOW MANY SIGNS TO PUT UP', - ' (15 CENTS EACH)', - ' 3. WHAT TO CHARGE PER GLASS', - '', - 'SIGNS BRING CUSTOMERS, BUT THE FOURTH', - 'SIGN HELPS A LOT LESS THAN THE FIRST.', - '', - 'WATCH THE WEATHER. A HOT DAY IS WORTH', - 'MORE GLASSES AND A HIGHER PRICE. A', - 'CLOUDY DAY MIGHT TURN INTO A STORM AND', - 'RUIN EVERY GLASS YOU MADE.', - '', - 'YOU START WITH $2.00. GOOD LUCK!', - ], +/** A paragraph, optionally led by the name of the thing it describes. */ +interface Entry { + term?: string + text: string +} + +interface Page { + title: string + entries: Entry[] +} + +const PAGES: Page[] = [ + { + title: 'WELCOME TO LEMONSVILLE', + entries: [ + { + text: 'YOU HAVE A CARD TABLE, A PITCHER AND A CORNER OF THE STREET. WHAT YOU MAKE OF THEM IS ENTIRELY YOUR OWN AFFAIR.', + }, + { + text: 'LEMONS, SUGAR, ICE AND CUPS ALL COST MONEY. A GLASS STARTS AT 2 CENTS TO MAKE AND GETS DEARER AS THE SUMMER WEARS ON.', + }, + { text: 'YOU OPEN WITH $2.00 IN THE TIN. WHOEVER ENDS THE SUMMER RICHEST WINS.' }, + ], + }, + { + title: 'WHAT YOU DECIDE', + entries: [ + { text: 'EACH MORNING YOU SET THREE THINGS:' }, + { term: 'GLASSES', text: 'HOW MANY TO MAKE TODAY.' }, + { term: 'SIGNS', text: 'HOW MANY TO PUT UP, AT 15 CENTS EACH. THE FOURTH SIGN HELPS A LOT LESS THAN THE FIRST.' }, + { term: 'PRICE', text: 'WHAT TO CHARGE A GLASS. ASK TOO MUCH AND NOBODY STOPS.' }, + { + text: 'EVERY GLASS IS MADE FRESH. WHAT YOU DO NOT SELL IS POURED AWAY, SO MAKE WHAT THE DAY WILL ACTUALLY TAKE.', + }, + ], + }, + { + title: 'READ THE SKY', + entries: [ + { term: 'SUNNY', text: 'STEADY TRADE AND NO SURPRISES.' }, + { term: 'HOT AND DRY', text: 'A BIGGER CROWD, AND THEY WILL PAY MORE FOR A COLD GLASS. A HEAT WAVE IS BETTER STILL.' }, + { + term: 'CLOUDY', + text: 'FEWER BUYERS ABOUT, AND THE DAY MAY TURN INTO A THUNDERSTORM THAT RUINS EVERY GLASS YOU MADE.', + }, + { text: 'THE FORECAST COMES BEFORE YOU BUY. THE STORM DOES NOT.' }, + ], + }, + { + title: 'READ THE STREET TOO', + entries: [ + { + term: 'STREET CREWS', + text: 'THE ROAD IS DUG UP AND THE TRAFFIC GOES WITH IT. THEY OFTEN STAY A SECOND DAY.', + }, + { + term: 'SUMMER FAIR', + text: 'HALF THE TOWN COMES PAST YOUR STAND, AND THEY ARE OUT TO SPEND.', + }, + { + term: 'RIVAL STAND', + text: 'SOMEBODY SETS UP ON THE NEXT CORNER AND TAKES A SHARE OF THE STREET UNTIL THEY MOVE ON.', + }, + { text: 'ALL OF IT IS ANNOUNCED BEFORE YOU COMMIT. GOOD LUCK!' }, + ], + }, ] export function IntroScreen({ onDone }: { onDone: () => void }) { const [page, setPage] = useState(0) const last = page === PAGES.length - 1 + const { title, entries } = PAGES[page] return (
HOW TO RUN A LEMONADE STAND - {PAGES[page].map((t, i) => ( - {t} + {title} + + + {entries.map((e, i) => ( +

+ {e.term && {e.term}} + {e.text} +

))} +
{page > 0 && setPage(page - 1)}>BACK} @@ -55,7 +95,7 @@ export function IntroScreen({ onDone }: { onDone: () => void }) { {last ? 'START' : 'MORE'} - PAGE {page + 1} OF {PAGES.length} + {page + 1} OF {PAGES.length}
diff --git a/src/components/ReportScreen.tsx b/src/components/ReportScreen.tsx index 2f18869..6fdd078 100644 --- a/src/components/ReportScreen.tsx +++ b/src/components/ReportScreen.tsx @@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ export function ReportScreen({ return (
- $$ LEMONSVILLE DAILY FINANCIAL REPORT $$ + $$ THE DAY'S TAKINGS $$ - {player.name}, YOU DO NOT HAVE ENOUGH - MONEY LEFT TO STAY IN BUSINESS. + {player.name}, THERE IS NOTHING LEFT IN + THE TIN. YOUR STAND IS FINISHED. )} diff --git a/src/components/TradingScreen.tsx b/src/components/TradingScreen.tsx index ebb5343..aa0065d 100644 --- a/src/components/TradingScreen.tsx +++ b/src/components/TradingScreen.tsx @@ -65,9 +65,9 @@ export function TradingScreen({
DAY {conditions.day} IN LEMONSVILLE - A THUNDERSTORM HIT LEMONSVILLE EARLIER - TODAY, JUST AS THE STANDS WERE BEING - SET UP. EVERYTHING WAS RUINED!! + THE SKY OPENED OVER THE TOWN THIS + MORNING, RIGHT AS THE STANDS WENT UP. + NOT ONE GLASS SURVIVED IT.
diff --git a/src/game/constants.ts b/src/game/constants.ts index bd93de7..9904318 100644 --- a/src/game/constants.ts +++ b/src/game/constants.ts @@ -18,20 +18,11 @@ export function costPerGlass(day: number): number { export function costMessage(day: number): string[] | null { if (day === 1) - return [ - 'ON DAY 1 THE COST OF LEMONADE IS', - '2 CENTS PER GLASS.', - ] + return ['LEMONS ARE CHEAP THIS WEEK. A GLASS', 'COSTS YOU 2 CENTS TO MAKE.'] if (day === 3) - return [ - 'YOUR COST OF LEMONADE HAS GONE UP', - 'TO 4 CENTS PER GLASS.', - ] + return ['LEMONS HAVE GONE UP. A GLASS NOW', 'COSTS YOU 4 CENTS TO MAKE.'] if (day === 8) - return [ - 'YOUR COST OF LEMONADE HAS GONE UP', - 'TO 5 CENTS PER GLASS.', - ] + return ['LEMONS ARE DEARER AGAIN. A GLASS NOW', 'COSTS YOU 5 CENTS TO MAKE.'] return null }